Need to fix the following points: A thesis statement is provided that clearly pr


Need to fix the following points:
A thesis statement is provided that clearly previews three strategies to promote public transportation, including offering discounts, making commuting more manageable, and providing better information about schedules and routes. The essay also briefly discusses three recommendations to promote public transportation such as increasing the number of stops, increasing bus routes and train lines, and creating new forms of public transportation. Since the recommendations discussed in the essay do not clearly align with the strategies identified in the thesis statement, it is unclear if the thesis statement is previewing 2 to 4 main points. A thesis statement that previews 2 to 4 main points of the essay is needed.
Three recommendations to promote public transportation, including increasing the number of stops, increasing bus routes and train lines, and creating new forms of public transportation are briefly discussed. The recommendations to solve the problem do not appear to align with the proposed solutions previewed in the thesis statement. A clear and adequately supported recommendation to solve the problem that aligns with the 2 to 4 main points previewed in the thesis statement is needed.
The conclusion discusses several benefits of public transportation and highlights convenience and affordability as ways to make the most of public transportation. The conclusion does not appear to effectively summarize the essay’s content, as it does not clearly align with the main points previewed in the thesis statement or the recommendations discussed in the essay. A conclusion that is aligned with, and effectively summarizes, the essay’s content is needed.


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